Title -water world

Hook in sentence - splash splash i’m going so fast!

Beginning-  Introduction- The 5 W’s - When, What, Why,Where, Who

When we went to waterworld and hopped into the pool it was cold as ice. What we did was dolphin dive when you need to go deep into the water and go up again and that was brilliant. I don’t know why we do  swimming lessons  I think if a shark is chasing us we swim away really fast and you can survive.  At the beginning I forgot what dolphin dives were.I don’t know who the person was teaching us.

Middle -  First Paragragh - Uses your senses - smell, touch, feel,hear,see to explain what happened at the pool

Use aliteration, similes, onomatopeia

I felt cold freezing water and the bottom of the deep cold pool. This pool smelt like chlorine and it smelt weird. I feel rough wall and the side of the changing room. I hear lots of shouting in the Flaxmere pool.                                                                                                           I  see lots of people going fast up the lanes.

Middle -   Second paragraph - Use some dialogue - speech marks to write about what some people said.

“I beat Connor said Bison” “only just” said Connor. “I beat all of you” said Jake.” yeah cause you are good at swimming” explained`  Bison

Middle -   Third paragraph - Write about your favorite part and why it was your favourite.

My favorite part was the dolphin dive because I like going deep in the water and going really fast in the water.

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End -   Conclusion - Finish your story up - with a comment about how you feel about swimming or what you will be working on next time you go.

Now I need to go again on term 2 week 4.

Maui and the sun                                                                                                                                                       It was dark. The sun had came down. Maui couldn't see or eat his food. That sun!

said Maui ,he goes too fast, too fast, far too fast.

Maui called his brothers they came to him in the dark.

“That sun goes too fast” said Maui. He gets up and races across the sky.

then he goes away.The nights are too long and the days are too short.

“Yeah”! said his brothers. We don't get time to catch our fish. “We don't get time to hunt

and we don't get time  to eat our food” said Maui. “YeaH” said his brothers.

“You must help me” said Maui.

“We’re going to catch that sun to make it go more slowly” said Maui.

Maui’s brothers laughed. “We can’t make the sun more slowly” they said.

“We can” said Maui .”No we can’t” said his brothers.

“We will make flax ropes and we’ll catch him” said Maui.

“It's too hard” said his brothers.

“ No it won't be” said Maui.

“It will be easy” said Maui.

So the next morning they hid behind some the rocks and waited and waited.

And then they saw him and they got their flax ropes and threw it at him. He couldn't move then Maui got his dagger and swung it at the sun.

Then the sun said “stop, stop it's so painful”said the sun.

Maui said l”et him go then”. They let him go and the sun went a lot slower.

                              Amazing things pic story - choose a picture from the file sent to you in your writing folder.Make a new writing document and title it.

• Your story should have a hook in sentence, a beginning middle and end, descriptive words, long and short sentences and capital letters and full stops.
• Your story could have paragraphs, speech and speech marks, alliteration, onomatopoeia and similes.
• Edit and check your story on your own , with a buddy and have it checked by a teacher before you blog

                                                                                                                                                                                  “It's raining lollies” said the people. “Let's get a few cranes to pick up the giant lollies and let's make lolly soup".

   “But it might be poisonous” said Phoenix “why would it be poisonous?” said Nimai.

So one million years on. then they found out that it was the best food they have ever had but not healthy.  

  100 years later they were very very fat and the little kids need to roll to school which was quite funny. Andrew said he will want to run on the fat kids because it might be funny. Why will they even eat that? “I hate lolly soup” said Jake loudly. That stuff is like vomit to me.

  Phoenix  said he liked the lolly soup.” I don’t know why” said Carter.

“Ok” let's do something else because I'm bored said Nimai and Jake.

“There is nothing to do in miniature city because it’s soooooooooo small “said Carter.

“Should we just get out the town for the rest of the day?” said Jake.

   “Don’t stay out there for too long because I’m scared of the dark” said Nimai.

So they came back at six o'clock and they had burgers for dinner.

HB Fire Story

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                   Hawke’s Bay Fire

Huge fire sparks State of emergency

crash boom our House is on fire help us help us.

The fire was big as the world.

The fire was strong as a tornado.

Ahhh help us I don’t want to lose Bumble and George help us help us!

Why is it mine not someone else.

Why do I have to lose Bumble and George why?

Boom I lost Bumble and George, why is it me?

Swing Bridge

WALT - use our senses and the 5 W’s when writing

There is a awesome
photographer in the enchanted forest. It took days to search to find the enchanted forest because it was in the middle of nowhere. I don’t know why people go there because it is so dangerous, there are grizzly bears, 2 metre sharks, poisonous dart frogs, snakes and much more. What will happen if I cross the bridge will it break, will it snap on the other side?  If I was the photographer I will never cross that bridge.