Title -water world

Hook in sentence - splash splash i’m going so fast!

Beginning-  Introduction- The 5 W’s - When, What, Why,Where, Who

When we went to waterworld and hopped into the pool it was cold as ice. What we did was dolphin dive when you need to go deep into the water and go up again and that was brilliant. I don’t know why we do  swimming lessons  I think if a shark is chasing us we swim away really fast and you can survive.  At the beginning I forgot what dolphin dives were.I don’t know who the person was teaching us.

Middle -  First Paragragh - Uses your senses - smell, touch, feel,hear,see to explain what happened at the pool

Use aliteration, similes, onomatopeia

I felt cold freezing water and the bottom of the deep cold pool. This pool smelt like chlorine and it smelt weird. I feel rough wall and the side of the changing room. I hear lots of shouting in the Flaxmere pool.                                                                                                           I  see lots of people going fast up the lanes.

Middle -   Second paragraph - Use some dialogue - speech marks to write about what some people said.

“I beat Connor said Bison” “only just” said Connor. “I beat all of you” said Jake.” yeah cause you are good at swimming” explained`  Bison

Middle -   Third paragraph - Write about your favorite part and why it was your favourite.

My favorite part was the dolphin dive because I like going deep in the water and going really fast in the water.

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End -   Conclusion - Finish your story up - with a comment about how you feel about swimming or what you will be working on next time you go.

Now I need to go again on term 2 week 4.